I moved backwards every step he took. I looked into her cold, dark eyes and slowly made my way up the stairs. Many more details and dialogue are needed. I was right, when I went downstairs nothing was there. He stepped into the puddle of blood causing a small splash. There were spider webs all over in the basement.
Voice 5 The voice in the narrative adds much to the suspense and intensity of the story and creates interest. You would be mingling with others outside of classroom setting , so you get some interactions. This crazy driver is driving carelessly down the road. The writer needs to show more feeling. I even went down to the basement with her, just to prove that monsters and ghosts didn't exist. Yes, it was a dark red colored liquid which smelled unfamiliar; it must have been blood.
So she calls the police and reports that a stranger has been calling her and hanging up. She was only five years old, and she said she saw monsters. Shelby is bringing home her boyfriend, to stay with her till they leave again. Shelby is bringing home her boyfriend, to stay with her till they leave again. Shelby has been in college, she finally gets the summer to go home and be with her family for a few months till college starts up again. Most of the story flows well.
I looked into her cold, dark eyes and slowly made my way up the stairs. So, the co-curricular activities that you get involved would be good training ground for you to learn and practice. Then all of the sudden we heard really loud steps coming from the room next to ours. She would hide behind me and point at a dark corner and say that the 'monsters' are there. As they are going down the road, Shelby is trying to figure out what just happened.
As hours passed, it got darker, cloudier, and windy. I had a family once, my parents and a little sister. Most of the story flows well. He slowly put his hand out and he started to approach me. This was no longer a place of bliss but of doom and despair, this was a graveyard. We try not to walk so close to that house any more.
Moving my head upwards I seen a man shaped figure whose face was covered with a mask. As I got older I was mean to my little sister. Just go up to my room and stay there. She was just being my sister. Many more details and dialogue are needed. I was the oldest child.
The emotions and feelings going through my head were mixed. The smell of cold iron and dirt filled the air. Several lines of dialogue are included. After a few more minutes the phone rings again. When she arrived they told her they probably wouldn't be back until late, and that the kids were already asleep so she needn't disturb them.
Then suddenly I seen a shadow surrounded by rays of sunlight. All the toys were very creepy the toys were robot clowns but the second half of their faces were all rusty and not colorful. A married couple were going out for the evening and called in a teenage babysitter to take care of their three children. The writer needs to show more feeling. You could try reporting the prank caller to the phone company. She goes back to her homework, then the phone rings again. Punctuality and respect for others' opinion would be learned in the process too.
We try not to walk so close to that house any more. They keep driving trying to ignoring the thing they just ran into. He was holding my bag. The smell of cold iron and dirt filled the air. It was not until years later that Lebanon was thrust into war against one of its neighboring nations, Israel.